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Student writing sample:
I was living in [Country A] in a flat and in [Country B] in a independent house.
On here there are a lot of places for vaction. Because in my country there aren't a lot of places to go.
We can go site seeing.
Our appeaince is different and our color of our skin.
Our hairs are blacks and here are white.
Here is best because
I think it is bigger, comfortable and lots of space. There is polluted and doesn't have much space.
Here has snow, in my country none. Here people are tall and in my country people are small but some people are tall.
Uses more utility words (house, places, skin, hairs [hair]), descriptive words (blacks, white, comfortable, space, bigger,
tall), subject-specific words (country, independent, vactions [vacation], polluted) and academic words
(different, appeaince [appearance]) related to curricular concepts.
Writes a range of grammatical structures demonstrating some control of word order agreement (There is polluted and doesn’t
have much space.), plurals (places, lots, people), tense (is, are) and subject–verb agreement
(people are).
Writes complex sentences in simple paragraphs (Here has snow, in my country none.).
Level 3: Uses sentence frames to write ideas (Here ...).
Produces text using a writing template to write a personal response (I was living …).
Level 2: Connects ideas in simple sentences using familiar conjunctions (and, because, but),
time markers and sequence markers.
Level 3: Connects ideas in related sentences using conjunctions, time markers and sequence markers.
Edits for end punctuation (.), commas in a list, simple tenses (aren’t, can go site seeing, think) and regular
spelling (because, people, small).
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